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Post  MewMew100 Sun Jan 08, 2012 9:11 pm

I'm gonna try a different style of writing on this story.

Prologue:

From the first moment of my birth to the final moment of my death, I always knew that I was special, that I was meant for greatness. I know I may sound conceded, but it is true. Why else would I have been given the mind I own, the powers to walk and speak with spirits? I shall tell you my story, from beginning to end and I hope that you'll see and truly understand my living and the harsh journey I took to get where I died, emotionally and physically.


Chapter One: Awakening.

Voices swirled around me like an angry void of fire that swallowed up any sign of life and innocence. Slowly, light filtered through the darkness that I had thought was the only thing to existed besides the unknown voices. Within the next few moments, I could see everything. Or what I thought to be everything. I was in a dark, damp place that had a sweet scent. A scent I knew to be milk. As I wriggled towards the strong scent, I could see large clumps of pale greenish white clinging to the stony wall whose scent I also found beneath myself, soft and warm. Looking away at the walls, I clambered into something large and warm. Another bed of moss? No, this was much softer and warmer. Looking up, I saw a large, pointed face staring back at me. Her eyes were a soft sea foam green and her long pale gray fur made me long to cuddle with her. I opened my mouth to speak, but I had yet to ever talk and only a familiar squeak sounded. The large creature bent down and licked my face, mewing,"Why my little one, your eyes are open. This must be told to Goldleaf." It recognized both the queen's voice and the name she spoke of. I had heard of this 'Goldleaf' before and from my memory of the other voices speaking about him, I knew he must have been important to them. Just then, another strange, yet familiar scent filled the air and a loud voice caused me to flinch.
"Mistbird, Coralclaw has just come back from a patrol and said- Wait, are her eyes open?! Already?! Wow, that's so fast-"
The downy grey she-cat now known to be Mistbird shushed the rushing tom who was dark black with pale blue, almost white eyes.
"Flintfoot, calm down my dear kit and fetch your mentor. Tell him that the kit has opened her eyes."
Flintfoot dashed off and soon came back with a large red tabby tom, their return startled me as I watched with wondering eyes.
"Mistbird, is it true? Has she really opened her eyes?" The largest cat's tail whisked around nervously and I struggled to hold in the urge to pounce upon it.
Nodding her head, Mistbird smiled and mewed,"Yes Coralclaw. She can see, though I'm sure its a bit blurry."
She was right. My sight was a tad blurry, but its only to expect as a kit whose seeing thing all for the first time.
Suddenly, I leaped up in fear as another voice accompanied by the pounding of paws and the rattle of pebbles erupted from the two cats' conversation, however, the voice seemed to calm me a bit, it sounded as soft and smooth as silk. "As medicine cat, it is my duty to examine the kit during her first sights. You should have told me about this sooner."
Both Mistbird and Coralclaw looked at the large gold tom with green eyes. "Yes Goldleaf," they mewed together, glancing back at me where I sat near the back of the cave.
"So....now to examine you, murderer of our deputy."

Chapter Two: Confusion.

Shivering as my belly lay sprawled across the freeze stone slab, I watched with wide eyes as the large gold tom poked and prodded at my flank, ears, and pads as if he were searching for something. Standing at the entrance of this new den was Mistbird and Flintfoot, obviously one of her older kits who was still in training.
"Well, she definitely resembles Corefreeze in more ways than just one. Same large paws and hard black pads, same bulky build and large stance, and similar pelt colors and markings. There's no mistaking it. It was her size that made it too difficult for Corefreeze to birth her without losing too much blood."
I flinched at the sorrow in his voice. What had I done to sadden these cats so much? I looked up at Mistbird, who only dipped her head. Suddenly she jerked her head up and I squealed out as a loud cry filled the air.
"Smokestar's back! She's back from Moon-Shoals!"
Moon-Shoals?! I thought, bewildered. Goldleaf had turned his head to look out of his den, but didn't move any other parts of his body, remaining next to me.
"I'll tell her," meowed Mistbird, trotting off quickly as muffled meows of welcome and worry grew louder. I looked at Goldleaf, who was now looking at me.
"So Soulthunder. You body structure shows me that you have pure Waveclan blood, so your father must be a warrior. However, its now up to Smokestar to co me up with what to do with you. Kits without their true mothers often are too weak to survive in our clan's conditions, even with a foster parent." His voice was saddened as his licked the thick tuft of cool blue fur atop the space between my ears, I growing groggy with every word he said. A few moments later, I blacked out as an angry voice flooded my ears.

"How dare we even ponder about keeping a cursed beast such as Soulthunder among us! You heard the name Goldleaf bestowed upon her. 'Soulthunder'. 'Soul' for when she stole her mother's soul and 'thunder' from when the curse of the Storm came upon the night she was born! I say we kill her!"

"Rainscales! How could you even say that?! What if cats shunned your daughter Berrysnow for becoming lamed during the Flood of the Fang Sea?! I say we keep Soulthunder! She's just a kit!"

"A kit she may be, Lightsplash, but Rainscales is right. She has been cursed by the Storm of the Spirits and anyone she grows attached to will sure face the same fate as Corefreeze."

"Bleedingtears, you may be the wisest of all senior warriors, but we can't just kill her-"

"Silence!" hissed a proud-sounding voice. An extremely small, dark gray she-cat walked up, her midnight blue eyes unreadable to her clanmates. "I am leader here, if you all remember that, so I'll come up with how to deal with the kit." All the other cats dipped their heads and backed up to form a circle around the tiny leader. Glancing back at the medicine cat's den, she sighed and began. "Soulthunder, by the Cove of the Clans' code, must be punished for killing another cat, accident or not. Since Corefreeze was deputy, the circumstances are even higher and more severe. So, by my word of law, Soulthunder, daughter of Corefreeze, shall be sentenced to exile beyond assistance. Her death shall not happen at our paws, where another cat would have to be punished. At dawn, she will be sent away without food, water, or herbs."

The meeting ended, cats leaving to tend to their duties, and Smokestar met up with her best friend, Goldleaf. She told him her choice and he agreed, the two walking out of camp to chat. You are probably wondering how I know all of this, aren't you? Well, when someone sleeps, sure they're unconscious, but their minds still process thoughts and sounds even throughout resting.

Finally, the star-filled darkness began to fade, the pinkish sky of dawn approaching, matching the tint of my waking gaze...

Chapter Three: Unexpected Goodbye...

I was nudged to my paws, my large white toes standing out against the dark stony ground. I shivered as a waddled, my kit fat thick and fluffy, through what was the camp; a large, enclosed cave holding multiple tinier caves within its rocky walls. It seemed like a perfect place to live in safety, at least, that's what I thought as Goldleaf continued to push me towards the bright light that poured in through a gaping hole. Other cats like Bleedingtears and Fleetfoot stared at me from afar as if they were too afraid to come near me. I didn't mind since I barely knew them or anything that was actually happening.

"Oof!" I replied as a hard push knocked me off my paws onto my belly, my breath stolen from me and I gasped quickly to retrieve it. I blinked several times, my newly developed sight not immune to the sun's harsh light as we spent most of our time in darkness. I looked behind me, my pale pink eyes locking with his warm, gentle green gaze. Without a word, he turned and padded away, leaving me dumbfounded as a large patrol of angry-looking warriors charged at me only after a moment past and I was still sitting there. I dashed clumsily away from the hissing, spitting strangers, my mind kept on fleeing, though I had no idea where to go. That's when it happened.

With a high pitched squeal, I tripped on a sharp patch of gravel, splitting my pads open to the nature elements and went rolling down a stone hill towards the small woods on the opposite side of the land, closer to the scent of pine and dirt and farther from the smells of seawater and familiar cats. The last thing I remembered was hitting my soft head against a boulder.
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I came to a while later, the sky was beginning to set and I was surprised to see a fat tabby sitting in front me, just staring down where I laid in a bundled heap.
Without a sound, nor any warning, the cat plucked me up by my long-furred scruff and carried me off deeper into the woods. With my head pounding and my body shaking with every step the tabby took, it was hard for me to keep my eyes open, sleep sucking me deeper and deeper into its massive sea of dreams.

Was I really just being carried away? Or could I just be dreaming of this?

Chapter Four: Joyful Noise..?

~
I was practically gliding across the soft earth ground, my large paws pounding against the ground as the tawny fur of a vole was held clamped in my jaw; the damp fur sticking to the roof of my maw. My eyes glittered as I grew close to my destination, their scents filling my nose along with the sharp, metallic tang of blood.

"Blu! Oh darling, look at what you caught!!"

My ears rang with the sweet sound of Tabitha's voice, the fat tabby she-cat running up to me, her thick legs pattering back and forth with her short tail lashing. I had stayed with Tabitha and her mate, Rudy, since she found me out in the wild. She had nursed me to health for nearly six moons and now I just came back from my first hunt.

"A vole! How lovely!" I was tackled in her warm embrace, before she yowled, her head turned around like an owl's,"Rudy! She caught a vole!! Come and see!!" I dropped the vole and licked her cheek, my eyes glittering happily.

"Well looky thar, sug'r-plum! That's probably tha larg'st vole I've ev'r darn seen!" Rudy walked up to me, his thin grey pelt twitching from the fleas that nibbled along his spine.

"You think so?!" I squeaked out loud, my voice muffled a bit from the fur still caught in my throat. I paused for a moment to cough it up; a slimy, wet ball of fur popping from my maw. "Accck! Nasty!"

Tabithia nuzzled my cheek and licked one of my large ears, her tabby cheeks fat and fuzzy against my nose. "Ahhhh-choooo!!" I wrinkled my face, feeling itchy from the mix of fur and blood.

"Ya' must'rve come fr'm somew'ar wh're that cats hunt like.....re'lly well." Rudy purred, his throat raspy and deep.

During the middle of our hugging, nuzzling session, a sharp, roaring cry rose from a few tail-lengths away, and we all whipped around to see it; its glossy eyes wet with teary rage, matching its teeth that hung long and dripping, its long red tongue lolling out of his long muzzle.

"GAAAAARRRRAAAAAAAAA!!!!!-"

Chapter Five: Raining Fire, Titus' blood.

My heart was pounding as I darted left and right to escape the snapping jaws of the creature who had gained the worst reputation around these parts. His stormy grey black fur was matted with dirty and blood stains from old fights, his transparent blue eyes set on the kill.

"Blu! To the burrow! He can't get us there!"

I followed the sound of Tabitha's voice as if I were a jay in the dead of Freeze when a lone worm was spotted by my keen eyes. My paws pattered against the ground, muffled by the soft crunch of leaves beneath my pads. I neared closer and closer to the den where I had spent most of my life so far when a sharp pain run up my right, front leg. For a moment, I couldn't breath; I don't know if it was out of fear, pain, or exhaustion, but when the wolf was upon me, a small squeak erupted from my jaws and a dark shape glided across, his body like a shadow as his body seemed to be pressed up against the beaming sun. Its warm, joyous glow not affected by what was happening way down below where Rudy scrabbled with Titus.

"Arg! T'tus, get ya'rr maggert-filled skins out er mah land!"

Rudy's claws sliced open the canine's nose, and shredded his ears, a steaming spray of blood raining down on us like a fall of liquid fire upon the green earth. I hissed in pain and I was yanked up by the fat tabby she-cat, Tabitha's quick running for safety surprisingly faster than I had expected. As my eyes began to close, I saw Rudy charge at Titus, the wolf already running for the hills, but as soon as the wolf was out of sight, the world around me was too.

Chapter Six: Speaking with Spirits.
~
When I rose, my eyes hazy and my paws stinging from running across a thorn-littered ground, it took me a moment to notice that the world around me was unrecognizable. The sky had no blue, violet, or black tinge. No stars or clouds laced it with such majesty as before. Now, only an empty gaping hole of gray lay overhead, and the ground an off, indigo shade flecked with glittering blades of starlight-filled grass. This world smelt sweet of foreign herbs, but the feel of unease drained me of any relaxation.

Suddenly, I felt my limbs dissolve, my blood and bones and organs turning into a most painful nothing...and yet, I was still whole. A million presences came over me, cramming my head full of brain-bursting murmurs and chattering and crying in odd, ancient tongues that most couldn't understand...yet I did..... (chapter tbu)


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Post  MewMew100 Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:05 pm

Added Chapter one. See if you can understand it.
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Post  Torchiclove Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:10 pm

Hmmmm....This is all I've concluded:
When the kit was born, her mother was the deputy and died giving birth.
Or something like that....:p
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Post  MewMew100 Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:11 pm

Yes,but do you know who? If not, just wait for the next chapter.
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Post  Torchiclove Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:14 pm

I have the strange feeling it's Oceanfeather o.o
Oh, or Soulthunder.
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Post  kbwood Tue Jan 31, 2012 8:35 pm

I think is Sooooouuuulthundeeeeerrrr! XD
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Post  MewMew100 Fri Feb 03, 2012 9:23 pm

Just added chapter 2
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Post  kbwood Fri Feb 03, 2012 10:01 pm

I KNEW IT!! XD

... Poor Soulkit...
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Post  Torchiclove Fri Feb 03, 2012 10:03 pm

I knew it, too! Soulthunder!
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Post  MewMew100 Fri Feb 03, 2012 10:10 pm

Technically, Waveclan has different rules and code, one being that they get their full names at brith.
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Post  kbwood Fri Feb 03, 2012 10:11 pm

Weird.... XP
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Post  Rosethorn95 Sun Feb 05, 2012 12:13 am

Ohhhh I like this story.
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Post  MewMew100 Sat Feb 18, 2012 3:03 am

Added chapter 3...kinda short and boring, I know...
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Post  kbwood Wed Feb 22, 2012 4:47 pm

MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!
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Post  MewMew100 Sun Mar 04, 2012 1:59 am

added chapter 4...
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Post  kbwood Sun Mar 04, 2012 2:58 pm

Awesome!! Heheh, Soul was kinda spoiled during her six moons with Tabitha and Rudy. XD
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Post  Rosethorn95 Sun Mar 04, 2012 9:46 pm

Well damn this is getting good.
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Post  MewMew100 Sun Mar 18, 2012 2:04 am

one and a half new chaptars added.
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Post  kbwood Fri Mar 23, 2012 9:23 am

Mysterious.... :3
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Post  ShadowSL Sun Sep 16, 2012 1:20 pm

Your story is really intriguing and I like the style. As it is though, I think you could do just a little more with it. unless it is what you're going for, you don't want to leave your reader confused about what is going on. Else your story becomes hard to read and you'll chance losing your reader's interest.

Overall though, I'm very impressed. Very nice, good storyline, Can't wait to read more of it Smile
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Post  MewMew100 Sun Sep 16, 2012 1:23 pm

Thanks. I'm still working on it, but the 6th chapter is only partly finished Razz
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