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Post  dragonnaruto Sat Oct 08, 2011 9:40 pm

I don't get it...
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Post  Sheyna Sat Oct 08, 2011 9:42 pm

I'm not racist at all. I make a point not to be, because so many people I know are.
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Post  Torchiclove Sat Oct 08, 2011 9:44 pm

LOL XD! I really do try not to be racist though. I do know a LOT of racist jokes though, my friends keep saying 'em. My great grandfather is REALLY racist....
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Post  Chibi248 Sat Oct 08, 2011 10:20 pm

Being racist is stupid.
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Post  Green Hornet Sat Oct 08, 2011 10:21 pm

My friend, I do believe that was racist in a way. Against racists.
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Post  Torchiclove Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:53 pm

Character name: Stoneclaw
Gender: Tom
Age: 26 or so
Appearance: Large grey tom with white socks on his back legs and white toes on his front legs. Glittering green eyes.
Brief personality: He doesn't like to talk much. Unlike his sister he isn't very open and rarely tells all the secrets that he holds. Stoneclaw will defend his clan at any cost. Doesn't like rogues or dogs.
Brief History: His parents and brother were brutally murdered by a viscious dog when he was 5 moons old. Only him and his sister, Moonpelt, survived. 'Nuff said.
Which aspect(s) of this character do you want to develop more: Everybody thinks he is an asshole. I don't like it. IT IS FUCKING ANNOYING WHEN EVERYBOY IS CONSTANTLY RIPPING ON YOUR CAT.

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Post  Chibi248 Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:56 pm

(If you stop making him such an ass maybe our cats wouldn't be ripping on him)
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:57 pm

Yeah, its pretty annoying when you rip on Thornpaw too. Like what do you have against Thornpaw, your always picking on him. >.>

Maybe make him less whiny. Sort of reclusive keeps to himself in a gruff sort of way. Make him stop picking fights with other cats randomly. Basically, A little bit less talkative, more shy, doesn't like to talk to people. But is still in the center of the action. He speaks with actions, more than words.
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Post  Torchiclove Sun Oct 09, 2011 1:59 pm

Fine.....Don't expect Stoneclaw to say anything for weeks if you wwant him too. If everybody keeps hating him then I'll just go ahead and kill his ass.
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:00 pm

Torchic! This is what GH is always complaining about. You kill off your characters to make new ones! Just slowly start changing his personality to a more likable one.
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Post  Torchiclove Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:01 pm

I'm just saying if everybody keeps hating him no matter what I do I will kill him. I'm tired of it.
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:05 pm

Everyone hated Thornpaw in the beginning. But did I kill him off? No. You just need to develop Stoneclaw's personality more.

First make what you think is the ideal personality for Stoneclaw. Try to describe it in at least a 10 sentence paragraph. Once you've done that, slowly start changing Stoneclaw's personality in the RP.
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Post  Torchiclove Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:06 pm

At first everybody liked Stoneclaw. Then Thornpaw came along and now they hate him. Thanks a lot T-T (JK, mabye)
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:08 pm

T.T. You know what? Fine. Kill him off. I really don't give a crap anymore. I tried to help, but you just go have fun in your pissy little world.
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Post  Chibi248 Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:10 pm

I personally, didn't like Stoneclaw from the start. He has no depth in his personality and you expect everyone to be nice to him when he's mean.......no offense......
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Post  Torchiclove Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:11 pm

Sorry 'bout that. My family keeps talking to me while I RP and I don't like to be interupted cuz then my ideas get all lost. They pissed me off bad this time. real bad. I'll try your idea; it'll probably work.

Well, Chibi. You didn't start from the first RP. He had depth in his personality then.
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:53 pm

Try to recover that depth. This is going to be brutal. But here's my opinion of your characters:

Currently all of your charries, have almost no depth.

Stoneclaw's only depth is that he's constantly depressed and whiny. You barely RP Moonpelt, or Bearpelt so both of them are practically like a clean white slate. Quite frankly you don't need new characters because there are limitless possibilities to those two's personalities. You could shape them however you want.
You barely RP Riverpaw anymore, so what depth she used to have is also gone.
Sparrowkit is an ungrateful little unrealistic baby. I'm surprised he even remembers his mother. It would be realistic, if he thought Rosethorn was his mother. It would be realistic if he hated Petalmist for abandoning him when he was barely a day old. It would be realistic, if he only knows his mother from what Stoneclaw, or others, tell him of her. Not to mention the fact that he goes up to Rosethorn and says "I'm hungry, feed me." He's one hell of an ungrateful little bastard.

There are more things I would liek to say. But i think that's enough meanness for now. >.>


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Post  Green Hornet Sun Oct 09, 2011 2:57 pm

I agree with everything you just said.

*ducks as a computer labeled TORCHIC sails by my head*

But... well... yeah. You don't need new characters. You have those guys.

Hey, this reminds me. *turns head towards Pumpkin, Brian, and Giusepi* Well, mainly Giusepi. Imma go fill out the form!
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Post  Chibi248 Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:01 pm

I agree too....My charries probably don't have alot of depth, but I'm still developing them......
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:04 pm

For Thornpaw I made his personality a little shaky on purpose.

For Silver he's still a newb but i have his personality planned out.

I plan on slowly evolving Thornpaw's personality, for now his main goals are to get revenge. Once hes done getting revenge and is a warrior, thats when he'll hatch out of his egg, sort of.
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Post  Green Hornet Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:07 pm

Character name: Giusepi
Gender: Male
Age: Adult to senior warrior
Appearance: A large, muscular tom with a pure black pelt. Okay, maybe not pure black, some white hairs dot his chest from age, but they aren't that visible. He has bright yellow eyes and a long tail.
Brief personality: Giusepi is protective of those he cares for but is extremely proud. You can get him into a fight by insulting his tail, family, or... really anything. The only cat he only really backed down from was Ri Eititle, and would also back down from another fight if he told him to.
Brief History: Giusepi was born in a kennel in London with his two brothers and was adopted by an Irish couple on vacation. They took them back home to Ireland, where he met an Irish cat named Lovepaw. He took both his brothers into the land of Autumnclan, where they were soon apprenticed and then became warriors. Lovepaw became Gra (hint, HINT HINTEDY HINT HINT) and the two became mates and had four kits, Swiftkit, Firekit, Flamekit, and Oceankit. Only two became Autumnclan warriors. The food in Ireland was failing and Giusepi sent Swiftkit and Flamekit ahead with another friend of his to Frostclan. Later, he sent Firekit and Oceankit, now Lasair and Aigean, to Frostclan, as well, then came himself with his brothers after that.
Which aspect(s) of this character do you want to develop more: Everything. XD I haven't had much time to work with him.
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:10 pm

I'll help you develop him later. Not in the mood right now.
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Post  Chibi248 Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:21 pm

Character name: Lavenderpaw
Gender: Female
Age: 8 moons
Appearance: A white she-cat with a greyish tint. Lavender eyes.
Brief personality: Friendly, loves kits, and never stands up for herself.
Brief History: Father tried killing her and her sister. Her mother killed him, but died doing it. She and Ivypaw meet Rust and they go on a 6 moon journey, and end up in Frostclan.
Which aspect(s) of this character do you want to develop more: I really don't know.
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Post  dragonnaruto Sun Oct 09, 2011 3:24 pm

T.T

New rule: If you want help having your characters developed you must help others develop their characters.

List of Characters that need help developing:
Brian~Green Hornet's cat
Golau~Torchiclove's cat
Thunderkit~Sheyna's cat
Mercury~Rosethorn95's cat.
Stoneclaw~Torchiclove's cat
Giusepi~Green Hornet's cat
Lavenderpaw~Chibi248's cat
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Post  MewMew100 Sun Oct 09, 2011 4:28 pm

About Oceanfeather, I'm not sure what I would change. Cuz she's already dead and I haven't used as a main Starclan cat since the first RP...I think I might either Jewelpaw or Shinepaw on here for help. I pretty much have Cherrywing and Equestria's personalities handled out, but Honeykit's is being worked on Razz
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